Well done on completing this weeks tasks. For your food pyramid could you please add some more pictures to represent the other food groups. I like the photos you added to the "sometimes food", but I think it would look better with more photos. Also donuts and chips are considered sometimes food as they have high levels salt and/or sugar. This whether ice cream is more of a sometimes food rather than dairy.
I also like some of the ideas you have in your writing, such as only one person not being vegetarian. However, there are some spelling and grammar errors. For example, the name of our school should be in capital letters. You also have a couple capital letters that should be in lowercase. Also, remember we want to include paragraphs in our writing (beginning, middle and end). Also please remember to add your N.L and R.T. If you would like help with your writing please share your slides with me and I can assist.
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Kia ora Ayushmaan,
ReplyDeleteWell done on completing this weeks tasks.
For your food pyramid could you please add some more pictures to represent the other food groups. I like the photos you added to the "sometimes food", but I think it would look better with more photos. Also donuts and chips are considered sometimes food as they have high levels salt and/or sugar. This whether ice cream is more of a sometimes food rather than dairy.
I also like some of the ideas you have in your writing, such as only one person not being vegetarian. However, there are some spelling and grammar errors. For example, the name of our school should be in capital letters. You also have a couple capital letters that should be in lowercase. Also, remember we want to include paragraphs in our writing (beginning, middle and end). Also please remember to add your N.L and R.T. If you would like help with your writing please share your slides with me and I can assist.