Nice work this week. I like how you showed your thinking and working out for the math questions. I also like the DLO you made about a healthy lifestyle. Maybe next time you could have used more text features such as subtitles.
I think your writing for this week would have been strengthened if you had included a problem for your character. For example, it would have been interesting if people did not react well to his invisibility superpower. I was surprised that everyone was fine with it. What if your character couldn't turn visible again? You also need to make sure you use speech marks every time someone is talking, not just for some parts of characters talking.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Kia ora Ayushmaan,
ReplyDeleteNice work this week.
I like how you showed your thinking and working out for the math questions. I also like the DLO you made about a healthy lifestyle. Maybe next time you could have used more text features such as subtitles.
I think your writing for this week would have been strengthened if you had included a problem for your character. For example, it would have been interesting if people did not react well to his invisibility superpower. I was surprised that everyone was fine with it. What if your character couldn't turn visible again?
You also need to make sure you use speech marks every time someone is talking, not just for some parts of characters talking.