Nice work this week Ayushmaan. For Task 3, maybe you could have set out the information about the artist in a timeline like the previous tasks. I like the tui you had drawn for the STEAM project, maybe next time you could explain how that represents the Papakura area, what form of art will it be in (mural, sculpture etc...) and what materials would be used to create it. I liked the idea you had for your writing task this week and how your character is trying to escape from a maze. Next time you could split your writing into paragraphs (Beginning, middle and end). Also maybe sure you edit your work and some of your sentences are a bit long. I suggest reading your story out loud to see if it all makes sense.
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Nice work this week Ayushmaan. For Task 3, maybe you could have set out the information about the artist in a timeline like the previous tasks.
ReplyDeleteI like the tui you had drawn for the STEAM project, maybe next time you could explain how that represents the Papakura area, what form of art will it be in (mural, sculpture etc...) and what materials would be used to create it.
I liked the idea you had for your writing task this week and how your character is trying to escape from a maze. Next time you could split your writing into paragraphs (Beginning, middle and end). Also maybe sure you edit your work and some of your sentences are a bit long. I suggest reading your story out loud to see if it all makes sense.
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