Nice work this week Ayushmaan, I like how you completed quite a few maths tasks this week, maybe next time you could have a go at completing a chilli 4 question. I like the mini beast you have created using minecraft. Next time, make sure you include a longer description about it. Such as, describing what it's fur feels like, what does it eat, where does it live, what kind of personality does it have and if it has any predators.
Make sure you double check your editing before uploading your writing. I noticed that a few of your sentences are quite long. I suggest reading your story out loud. That way you will notice when a sentence is too long as you with run out of breath trying to read it. Maybe you could share your writing with me so I can also help you edit your work.
I like how you made a documentary about your dog, maybe next time you could include a bit more about what kind of food she eats and how old she is.
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Nice work this week Ayushmaan, I like how you completed quite a few maths tasks this week, maybe next time you could have a go at completing a chilli 4 question. I like the mini beast you have created using minecraft. Next time, make sure you include a longer description about it. Such as, describing what it's fur feels like, what does it eat, where does it live, what kind of personality does it have and if it has any predators.
ReplyDeleteMake sure you double check your editing before uploading your writing. I noticed that a few of your sentences are quite long. I suggest reading your story out loud. That way you will notice when a sentence is too long as you with run out of breath trying to read it. Maybe you could share your writing with me so I can also help you edit your work.
I like how you made a documentary about your dog, maybe next time you could include a bit more about what kind of food she eats and how old she is.